something euclidean

firefox, for the spellcheck, though on my main computer I've been using Opera and Safari just as much ; it can help if you're doing different things to have all ...

The beginning is beautiful; the first six or seven stanzas were very detailed and they made it easy to imagine this world and these people. The picture and the careful ...

This version of the rhyme scheme worked well, for all that couplets are difficult to do - they can sound singsongy at times, so well done [I didn't see the ...

The first time I read this it felt too detached - I don't know if this was the effect of the dialouge, or just the feeling that there was a ...

This sounds like an ode to summer reading more than anything. Like Col, I don't love the ellipses, though I guess they could stay -- on the provision that the ...

Nice. I enjoyed reading this - I have some picky things, of course, for editting. But it reminded me of my own violin which has given me this permanent pink ...

S3 works best, rhythmically, but it also seems like it's the most successful, typically Hypo stanza. The first stanza works too, though it is more abstract than he usually gets ...

Sometimes saying things simply can work beautifully and sometimes it falls a little flat. I was hooked from the fourth line of the poem (smuggling arms into a sweater, what ...

I have a sort of mental 'copy and paste' set of things for beginning writers, especially beginning poets: when I read something that's clearly written by a new poet I ...

I don't know about un-frying your muse but you might want to take a glance at the story "October in the Chair", by Neil Gaiman. *shameless plug of my favorite ...

this is not nearly as well thought out and sophisticated as anything by Williams, but I had fun with it. Any suggestions on the rhythm/rhyme, or on keeping the imagery ...

mwahahaha! I remember the originals of this. Be afraid. All my original picky crits of this from NaPo still stand -- Yes, I have both threads open. They do go ...

Any reason for the double spacing? it did make this a little hard to read. I ended up just squishing it back together to critique, as you can see. It ...

Also: read poetry . When you're learning to write poetry this is one of the most important things you can do. Read from different eras and styles; find what's constant ...

This world is the only one we have; the others are too far away. The universe rambles on and forgets itself, repeating old stories (perhaps). why do you need the ...